As I look at your picture I wish you were here
Those sweet words you whisper I can hear so clear.
When you say you love me and want to hold me tight
a Thrill runs down my spine ...
I dream of you holding me
I see together forever we are meant to be
The warmth of your body is still close to mine
As you and I are lost in time.
You reach out to touch me with your loving hand
I wish! this moment never comes to cease
when you say that you love me
I would say with you i will always be.
You hold a place within my life,
unusual and unique,
I picture what I think you are,
perhaps you picture me as well.
It is An intriguing game for both of us
for someone we havent yet seen....
So for this friendship
Perhaps the charm lies in the fact
that we havent yet met
So till we meet its only you in my dreamy eyes...
9 comments:
a superb composition to say d least....
ur ability to portray feelings thru words is outstanding .... but does ur expression relate 2 d fact tht we tend to b mystified n attracted to a persons image more than the person itself?? so essentially a person's being beautiful n nice is not as important as d fact tht we percieve tht person to b fairylike....
so now my algorithm fr say leading a better married life sez tht u shud create n image of ur spouse to b a gr8 one.. n believe in it to a gr8 extent making way fr his faults also...(aceept tht he may have certain faults n u may also have some gaps... but being together u sort of feel that those gaps dont exist...) u understand what i am trying to say naaa.... n tht is d primary thought behind ur poem ..tht feeling of timelessness when 2 souls r together cherishing each others presence..?
am i right??
well i hv many an algorithms in my mind regarding married life n whom to consult than the crowd on such a popular blog.. so miss shreya n all those readers plz b generous to advice n critize n discuss d ideas tht i putforth here...
one of d ideas is tht u write down all d +ve qualities of ur spouse in a copy n review it evry morning b4 she wakes up........
chances r tht u wud feel way to grateful to god fr having her than criticeze her... u wud really feel lucky 2 hv her nxt 2 u...
n as sumbody puts it..
IF U SPEND TIME ANALYZING N CRITICIZING N CORRECTING PEOPLE U WONT HAVE TIME TO LOVE....
NEWAY I AM NOT EVEN A TRIFLE AS GOOD AS miss shreya in xpressing myself but u got d feel naaa (bhavnaon ko samjho)
n i hv loads of such ideas to discuss n ask about so plz tell me miss shreya if i hv d permission to post my ideas here n get ur valuable advice n suggestions??
but ur composition as though translated moi feelings into words... i cud nvr hv done tht...
n this composition is one of those which can stir me into romanticism in d most mundane times of my life...
its certainly my favourite by far....
I sure appreciate your view point euphorical :) i mean i do understand what you were trying to say about after married life.
If i can put it right you are trying to say that
LIFE WITH THE PERSON YOU LOVE BECOMES SO BEAUTIFUL THATS YOU HARDLY VALUE ABOUT THE EXTERNAL BEAUTY OF YIUR PARTNER.
isnt it?
ya honestly right you really shouldnt worry about it there's no 2nd thought that i can add to this.
YOur ALGORITHM is absolutely right :)
hence i respect that.
NOw there's a 2nd part to this about criticizm which i feel you couldnt explain it apt what you meant to say was that we feel so gud abt the other one and value them so much we have no time to find faults ....but what i felt got conveyed was that Love made you so blind you are not even ready to see what is really worth an improving scope in your partner.
Buddy here im sure Love wud sense be little practical for love means to be complete with each other im sure its points to BRING OUT BOTH GUD AND BAD POINTS EQUALLY SPORTINGLY ISNT IT?
:)
I hope i could get you right ........my poem about those who love each other without meeting im sure there can b no ques of luks values above virtues :)
and now reagarding the submission of your discussions n view points plz you are very very welcome to begin any kind of discussion here.
You can personally mail me at shreyam_11@rediffmail.com
so that we can put up a topic/article under which i can keep adding from frm all :)
people .....
Thank you for appreciating my skill and giving your time to understanding my emotions
take care
shreya
thnx fr ur permission miss....
n indeed ur perspective is very right tht we shud be practical enuf n sporting enuf to leave space fr our accepting eachothers fallacies n try to gradually improve upon them indeed thts d more practical approach ...
thts d benefit of taking advice frm like minds.... i found wht ws misssing in my approach n thanx a million to miss shreya fr it... ill make d subsequent amendments in my algo....
n regarding those discussions, i am really thankful fr ur cooperative gesture... i will certainly mail u d topics before hand...
but due to my imminent head-on-collision with d xams in d offing i'll be a bit sporadic in my replies...
nevertheless its nice to find such a place where others experience n thought can help us chalkout our own understanding relationships....
n 1 more thing .. tht any creation of art whether it be a painting or a poem may convey different meanings n perspectives to different people according to their mind sets.. ofcourse the prespective of d author is of primary importance but different ppl relate wid d creation in diff ways depending upon dere past xperiences...
nvrtheless thnx a bunch miss surely our sharing of views will help me evolve into a better person....
nice one mam...
n prashant sir ne jo iska complementary likha haii woh bhi mast hai... kudos 2 u 2 ppl.....
hii well euphoria its right anything creative has different views....
I hope u do mail me soon whatever topics u have in hand to discuss further....even if ur replies are sporadic they are always welcome in my blog.and is it you who deleted the two consecutive comments ????
and Amul thx for the appreciation of Greymater's poem hope u comment in his poem itself :)
infact u can visit his blog itself
http://prashantspaces.blogspot.com/
take care adios
:)
I was just browsing yur blog and you have so much into yourself..
i will read whole of your blog one day:)
aww.. thank you so much anamika :)
it was such an old poem yaar .. way back when i was in my 2nd or 3rd yr of engg. ..i almost forgot browsing my own articles lol :P
sure dear do browse and let me kw how you like them :)
thanks a ton again :)
hugs :)
adios
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